Monday was Erotica Night Henderson Writers Group. So, feeling red as a radish, I read, an erotic chapter from my upcoming book, The Pack. I thought I would die of embarrassment. So naturally, I went home and rewrote it a full twenty percent hotter.
A problem arouse, the arousal was too much. Prudish modesty didn’t set in. Instead a feeling that Tereza and Ethan’s behavior in the scene was completely out of character did. This is a werewolf novel. In that society a promise cannot be broken. Tereza had promised her stepfather (the Alpha male) she wouldn’t mate with Ethan. So, she decided to orally pleasure him instead. This would have been consistent with her tendency to not exactly lie, but not tell the truth either. Sort of how Bill Clinton didn’t exactly lie when he said “I did not have sex with this woman.” It depends on how one defines sex, I guess. But I started thinking “Would she really do this?” Yes, she is that devious. But it just didn’t feel right. I know this might not sound like sage advice on writing, but since we’re dealing with characters and their emotions/motivations; if something feels wrong it usually is. Would she really risk violating her stepfather’s trusts by redefining “sex.” No. This applies to human character’s as well. The mousey person most likely isn’t a closet dominatrix, unless there’s some other hint of that side of her character before the sex scene. This can be easier said then done, while you’re cranking of the heat.
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